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Some people believe that teenagers should be required to do unpaid community work in their free times. This can benefit teenagers and benefit the community as well.

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It is important to consider how teenagers contemplate between free and busy hours. While some people contend that teenagers should involve in free social works during those
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, teenagers should involve in community
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 because it makes them social.
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 is because social works are usually gratifying and enlivening;
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, teenagers could build rapport in the society.
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, they can utilize their spare time and embark on a new relation, which is integral for safety and companionship need.
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, if teenagers do not involve in social
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, they may lack
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 during emotional turmoil.
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 ordeal. To put in a nutshell, since there are some obvious merits of teenager’s involvement in social
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 as it is exhilarating and invigorating, teens should engage in community
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 without financial motivation. Personally, I would involve in social
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 during free times. To put in a nutshell,
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 there are obvious merits of teenager’s involvement in social
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 as it is exhilarating and invigorating, we must take
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 consideration their need for refreshment and involvement in other sectors. Personally, I tend to partially
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 the argument that teens should engage in community
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; I would involve in social
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 during free times.
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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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