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Some people think that the best way to run a business is within the family. What are the advantages and disadvantages of a family run business?

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It is often argued that the best way to run a business is within the family.
However
, I strongly believe that
its
it is
it's
 not true as family run businesses have their own merits and demerits. The advantages and disadvantages of family run business are in the following paragraphs.
First
 of all, the best thing about these businesses is that you always have someone or the other as a support for yourself. They guide you and help you in increasing your competencies because of the relevant work experience which they have and family members always act like mentors and help you out. The obvious reason behind
this
 is the sense of belongingness and the attachment one has with his/her family.
For instance
, India's richest
man Mukesh
Accept comma addition
man, Mukesh
 Ambani guided and trained his children, so that they can take over his empire in the upcoming future.
Therefore
, having experienced
personels
group of people willing to obey orders
personnel
persons
 as teachers or relatives is quite helpful in the long run.
Secondly
, some of the worst case scenarios could be ego clashes, differences in opinion with respect to age, not taking the young ones too seriously. There can be issues for several reasons, one might not take the younger ones too seriously because of the professional work experience he/she has. There can be different opinions of people of different ages and sometimes fights may take place when your ideology does not match.
For example
, the
seperation
the state of lacking unity
separation
 of the Ambani brothers in 2002 after the death of their father.
Hence
,
such
 situations are seen very often and these are extremely difficult to avoid and they can only be ignored if there is decent understanding between the members. To recapitulate, I reckon the disadvantages overshadows the advantages of family run business.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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