Modern medicine helps to live a longer life. Do you agree?

The modern
medicine
is very important for living a long
life
. It
is depend
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has depended
depends
on new technology. People take very easy and quickly.
Also modern
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Also, modern
medicine
is very quick absorbing to
human body
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the human body
. It
is helps
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helps
has helped
to back to normal for people health condition.
Therefore I
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Therefore, I
agree that the modern
medicine
is helps
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helps
has helped
is helping
to live longer.
First
of all, the modern
medicine
can prevent incurable diseases. Doctors can find some diseases very early.
Then
doctors can give suitable medicines to patients. New modern equipments
are helps
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are helping
are helped
help
doctors is going to correct way.
Also
intelligent people in the world live a long
life
on helps from modern
medicine
.
That is
very important in the human society because their creative things are coming with them and they can help others for a
longer
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long
time when they are living in long
life
with comfortably.
Beside
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Besides
,
old population
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the old population
is increasing in the country. It is badly
effect
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effected
in
country’s economy
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the country’s economy
and especially for
third
world countries. But old people are very important in human society because their experience definitely helps to
living
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be living
have lived
safely and planning to
new project
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new projects
the new project
. ‘Experience is better than qualifications’
However
,
old
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older
people are living a long
life
; it is helping others to live a long
life
because we can get advice from them and they are covering our culture and society.
Moreover
, modern
medicine
is being addictive for some people, so that they cannot live without
medicine
. They should take
medicine
all their lives.
Also modern
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Also, modern
medicine
is very expensive.
Therefore most
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Therefore, most
of poor countries
couldn
requests polite permission
could
?
t
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T
take modern
medicine
and it has taken a commercial shape,
also
it is depending on money. In the modern
medicine
have not facts of human kindness. People who have money can take modern
medicine
. But indigenous
medicine
has
well human friendly shape
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a good human friendly shape
good human friendly shape
. It does not depend on money. To summarize; in my personal view, modern
medicine
is helping to live a long
life
with comfortably. Modern technologies are being supported to find
unburnable
incapable of being put up with
unbearable
diseases very early. So doctors can take
correct path
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the correct path
immediately.
Therefore
, may I not hesitate to agree with the above mentioned statement.
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