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Overpopulation of urban areas has led to numerous problems. Identify one or two serious ones and suggest ways that governments and individuals can tackle these problems.

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Growing population has been one of the major concerns for urban areas.
This
 essay will discuss the issue caused by overpopulation is the significant increase in
traffic
.
However
,
this
 problem is not insurmountable if the government of a country applies a solution which is going to propose in
this
 essay. The
first
 and foremost problem caused by overpopulation is continuous increase in the
traffic
. These days, millions of inhabitants have been shifting to towns because of employment or to establish their own business there.
Likewise
, the number of personal and public vehicles got increased, which is ultimately a reason of increase in
traffic
 congestions.
For example
, Bangalore, a city in south India, has been facing the same type of circumstance for the past 10 years. A feasible solution to
this
 hurdle would be to follow odd-even rule. In
this
 way, the amount of private vehicles on roads can be reduced significantly because according to that rule people are only allowed to use their personal vehicles for certain days or times in a week. To illustrate, Delhi, another city in north India, has been following the same protocol for past 3 years.
Therefore
, they able to reduce the amount of
traffic
 on roads in a very short period of time. In conclusion,
although
 modern cities face a variety of problems and one of them is rising in
traffic
,
this
 problem is not impossible to overcome. In my view, it is the government responsibility to tackle
this
 issue, and they should begin by considering one of the solutions proposed above. It should be a responsibility of individuals to follow laws wisely those made by
government
Suggestion
the government
 to control the
traffic
.
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