Governments give lots of support to artists, even though some people think it is a waste of money that could have been spent better elsewhere. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Governments of many states are supporting artists financially, but some individuals consider that it is wrong and there are many other areas to invest money in

more productive

Suggestion

a more productive way

way

This

essay agrees with the

second

opinion because the

art

cannot improve people’s life better in

material

Suggestion

a material way

material ways

way

. Supporting artists by financing their creativity is the

way

to bring the

art

into the masses.

This

support could make the entire

art

more popular in the society and could increase the number of artists overall.

For example

state

Suggestion

the state

states

could give aid to the beginner painter with renting gallery to expose his paintings and make them popular and in

this

way

this

artist could become famous. But

this

measures

Suggestion

measure

are not giving

Suggestion

is not giving

any significant values

for

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the society and, to be honest, are really

waste

Suggestion

a waste

of money.

On the other hand

, there are many other institutions which continuously need investments and financing of them is

vital

Suggestion

more vital

rather than the

art

. One of

such

areas is the

healthcare

Suggestion

health care

, because the level of its development takes effect on people’s life quality immediately. There are big costs for the medical insurances in many states and giving financial support to

this

area could decrease final costs of medicine for the people. Based on said above, supporting social services

are

Suggestion

more useful than supporting

arts

Suggestion

the arts

. In conclusion, there is a huge governmental support for the

art

and artists, but who really need more comprehensive government’s assistance are the social services and the

first

of them is

healthcare

Suggestion

health care

because it makes people live better and longer.

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Topic Vocabulary:

government patronage
cultural heritage
national identity
creative industries
unnecessary expense
essential services
democratize
private patronage
market forces
innovation
boost tourism
subjective nature
allocated ineffectively

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Governments give lots of support to artists, even though some people think it is a waste of money that could have been spent better elsewhere. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Fully explain your ideas

Some people think that meat is bad for health . Do you agree or disagree ?

Some countries achieve international sporting success by building specialised facilities to train top athletes instead of providing sports facilities that everyone can use. Do you think it is a positive or negative development?

In many countries, students take a year off finishing school should students take a gap year before attending university? What are the advantages and disadvantages of this trend?

Some people believe that men and woman are equal and so women should be able to do any job they want. Others feel that men and women are not equal and therefore there are certain jobs which are not suitable for woman. What’s your opinion?

Art classes, such as painting and drawing, are important as to a child's development as other subjects, so it should be compulsory in high schools. To what extent do you agree or disagree?