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Nowadays, more and more people decide to have children later in their life. What are the reasons? What are the effects on society and family life?

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It is true that currently a majority of people make a decision to have their offspring
late
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later
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 essay, I will illustrate some reasons for
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 trend and the correlation between having children late and
socieaty
an extended social group having a distinctive cultural and economic organization
society
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 There are some reasons explain why many people choose to bear a child late.
Firsly
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Firstly
, having children early may have a detrimental effect on
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the career ladder
career ladder
carrier ladder
careers ladder
 of them.
Nuturing
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Nurturing
 a newborn baby is a complicate process consuming many
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times
 so their children may lose excessive time on growing their.
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 result in losing chances to promote in their company which is the most priority with many people. Another
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reason
 is that many young people desire to experience
life
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 more. They want to travel or learn something interest before being busy with caring their children.
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,
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 tendency could have negative consequences with regard to society and family
life
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, it is difficult for older people to tackle the problem when their children grow up. Due to the generation gap, it is very hard to communicate with their children.
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,
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women
a woman
 getting pregnant later in
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 often
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move while supporting, either in a vehicle or in one's hands or on one's body
carry
 more potential health problems than those getting pregnant sooner.
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cause
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caused
 an increase of having a miscarriage or stillbirth for older mothers.
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,
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 could negatively affect the quality of the future workforce. In conclusion, there are a number of reasons why many people prefer giving birth later in
life
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As a result
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, there could be negative influences on individual families and the society at large.
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