The graph below shows the number of enquiries received by the Tourist Information Office in one city over a six-month period in 2011
The graph shows the dynamics of
enquiries
by the Tourist Information
office between January
and June
2011.
Enquiries
through telephone and in person were increasing between January
and June
2011, while
enquiries
received through letter or email was declining. Moreover
, the questions received by Tourist
Correct article usage
the Tourist
Information
office through personal talks increased in each month
of the period.
The Tourists mostly asked the office through
telephone in Change preposition
by
January
2002, with more than 800 occasions
happened
in that Wrong verb form
happening
month
, although
experienced a slight decline in the following month
to 800 occasions
in February. In March, there was a noticeable increase by
200 Change preposition
of
occasions
. The trend remained flat between March and April though a steep rise occurred in the
May and still increased by 200 Change the article
apply
occasions
at the end
of June
. This
figure was higher than its counterpart in January
.
Tourists enquired information
through personal talks Change preposition
about information
was
less happened than the other two in Unnecessary verb
apply
January
. Nevertheless
, in person
enquiry was constantly increasing at the rate of 200 Add a hyphen
in-person
occasions
in each month
between January
and March. There was a dramatic increase in April, the highest rate of increase among any other month
between January
and June
. In June
, in person
enquiry was four times higher than in Add a hyphen
in-person
January
.
Information
asked through letter or email was more than 600 Add an article
The information
occasions
in January
but began to decrease in the each of
following Change preposition
apply
month
until it was
plateaued in Unnecessary verb
apply
June
. Hence
, by letter
Add a hyphen
by-letter
enquiries
were less
in Correct quantifier usage
fewer
June
than in January
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