A growing number of people feel that animals should not be exploited by people and that they should have the same rights as humans, while others argue that humans must employ animals to satisfy their various needs, including uses of food and research. Discuss both views and give your opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own experience or knowledge.

An increasing number of people believed that animals
should be treat
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should be treated
well as humans and they are having the same right as mankind.
However
, others think that it is necessary for humans to
use
animals to
fulfill
put in effect
fulfil
our daily needs
such
as food, clothes and doing
experiment
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experiments
. Both
perspective
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perspectives
contain the same
right but
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right, but
I personally support with the
first
thinking.
First
and foremost, it is commonly believed that animals can develop the same emotion as humans,
thus
, people are not
allow
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allowed
to
use
them in any kind of activities.
Furthermore
, animals are able to fell pain, worry, depress and
etc
while
torment
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to torment
tormenting
tormented
by humans. To illustrate, when a younger horse is being
attack
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attacked
by humans,
it's
of a thing, of it; possessive form of "it"
its
mother will definitely worry about it and try the best to protect the younger horse.
Nevertheless
, some people support the opinion that humans need to
use
the sources on animals to produce our daily needs. Skin
on
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of
animals namely
Accept comma addition
animals, namely
crocodile, cow and snake are able to produce clothes, wallets and shoes that are necessary for humans to
use
.
In addition
, chicken meat, beef and fish contain the nutrients which humans
needs
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need
to consume
everyday
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every day
.
Therefore
, animals
must be employ
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must employ
must be employed
by mankind. From my point of view, I think that humans should
being
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be
nice to animals. Other than that, our technology
is become
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was becoming
was become
were become
more advance compare to
last
time,
hence
, it is possible to produce vitamin that
contain
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contains
the same nutrients as animals. In the conclusion, humans have the responsibility to protect and being nice to animals as they are
also
a life which is valuable as humans.

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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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