Some Governments say how many children a family can have in their country should be strictly controlled. They may control the number of children someone has through taxes. Is It sometimes necessary and right for a government to control the population in this way? Do you agree or disagree with this policy?

It can be
evidentially
unmistakably ('plain' is often used informally for 'plainly')
evidently
seen that the
population
around the globe is rising day by day.
Population explosion
Suggestion
The population explosion
and its control have become two main hot topics nowadays. Some governments try to fix
this
issue by adapting various means
such
as imposing taxes. I am in the
favor
promote over another
favour
that it is many a time important to control
population
by implementing
such
measures. On one hand, the growth in
population
is escalating steeply in the countries
such
as India and China, where around 34% of
world’s
Suggestion
the world’s population
population
is concentrated.
This
unchecked rise in
population
can be rectified by imposing taxes. To illustrate,
such
a model of taxation is working in
China where
Accept comma addition
China, where
the ‘one child policy’ is doing wonders and the whopping overpopulation of China has decreased to only 0.25% growth per annum which in turn, helped China to emerge as a super power in the past decade.
On the other hand
, other methods can be introduced by various governments as according to the conditions and circumstances of a particular nation.
For instance
, a new initiative is taken in many European countries
such
as Switzerland, where the people are discouraged to have more than two kids by making a precedent of not selling land to anyone having more than two children.
Moreover
, some other leadership of the developing countries
are encouraging
Suggestion
is encouraging
people to adopt the children rather than
begetting
appropriate to
befitting
their own.
This
, in my opinion, is rather a progressive step which is not only helpful for an
individual but
Accept comma addition
individual, but
also
for a society as a whole. To conclude, albeit it is the duty of the government to keep a check on rising
population
, it is more
responsibility
Suggestion
the responsibility
of citizens
instead
to act accountably.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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