More and more people are becoming seriously overweight. Some people say that increasing the price of fattening food will solve the problem. To what extent did you agree or disagree?

Many individuals are becoming very overweight. A number of people believe that inflating the cost of fatty foods will help tackle
problem. I totally disagree, that inflation is a solution to our rising overweight plight, of which the risk outweighs its benefit and
cannot be a permanent solution. In fact, it can be viewed as using a gun to kill a fly. In 1900, Ben Carson a Roman Scientist did a research on
closely similar or comparable in kind or quality or quantity or degree
populace using body mass index as a sub-tool. He discovered that a good number of the population lack awareness
the dangers fatty foods can cause to
of them or themselves
. More so, lack of adequate exercise can increase deposited fats in the body which can lead to some deadly
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diseases, for
for example
a stage of arteriosclerosis involving fatty deposits (atheromas) inside the arterial walls, thus narrowing the arteries
, increased heart failure
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obesity and diabetes milletus.
, World
Organization should organize
a series
of seminars on
benefits which includes
, engaging in daily exercise using a step counter wrist watch even while at work and more importantly, remain
, because
is wealth.
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