The table below shows the numbers of visitors to Ashdown Museum during the year before and the year after it was refurbished. The charts show the results of surveys asking visitors how satisfied they were with their visit, during the same to periods. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The table presents data about how many
visitors
Ashdown Museum
had, one year
before and one year
after it was modernized, while
the pie chars
illustrate the survey reports of how pleased were the Correct your spelling
charts
visitors
, during their visit, in the same timeframe.
The table shows a bigger interest among visitors
for
the newer version of the Change preposition
in
museum
, and the pie charts are representing their bigger satisfaction with the newly refurbished building.
The figures of
the total number of Change preposition
for
visitors
to Ashdown Museum
have seen a big increase after the rehabilitation work has ended. In the year
prior to the renovation, the museum
had 74,000 visitors
, while
in the year
after 18,000 visitors
more have
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it's
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its
totaling
a number of 92,000.
Regarding the pie charts, Change the spelling
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wich
presents the satisfaction percentages of those who visited the Correct your spelling
which
museum
, we can easaly
say they were more pleased with the new look of the Correct your spelling
easily
museum
. 35% completed the survey with very satisfied
compared to only 15% in the Replace the word
satisfaction
year
before the refurbishment. Moreover
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