The table below shows the numbers of visitors to Ashdown Museum during the year before and the year after it was refurbished. The charts show the results of surveys asking visitors how satisfied they were with their visit, during the same to periods. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table below shows the numbers of visitors to Ashdown Museum during the year before and the year after it was refurbished. The charts show the results of surveys asking visitors how satisfied they were with their visit, during the same to periods.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The table presents data about how many
visitors
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Ashdown
Museum
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had, one
year
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before and one
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after it was modernized,
while
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illustrate the survey reports of how pleased were the
visitors
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, during their visit, in the same timeframe. The table shows a bigger interest among
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the newer version of the
museum
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, and the pie charts are representing their bigger satisfaction with the newly refurbished building. The figures
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the total number of
visitors
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to Ashdown
Museum
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have seen a big increase after the rehabilitation work has ended. In the
year
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prior to the renovation, the
museum
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had 74,000
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,
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in the
year
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after 18,000
visitors
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more
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passed
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gates,
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a number of 92,000. Regarding the pie charts,
wich
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which
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presents the satisfaction percentages of those who visited the
museum
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, we can
easaly
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easily
say they were more pleased with the new look of the
museum
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. 35% completed the survey with very
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compared to only 15% in the
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before the refurbishment.
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the dissatisfaction percentages have dropped from 40% to 15% for the dissatisfied persons and
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from 10
% to 5% for those who were very dissatisfied.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 69%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words visitors, museum, year with synonyms.
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