Some people believe it is important to give gifts and presents to friends and family to show that we care for them. Others think that there are better ways to show affection to them. Discuss both the views and give your own opinion.

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the people
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care than just giving gifts. I disagree, to a reasonable extent, with the former as I believe that there are better avenues through which one can demonstrate love to family and friends alike other than giving presents. To start with, showing empathy; a critical human interpersonal skill, is a more effective way to
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care and appreciation to loved ones than giving gifts.
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is because individuals' numerous wants are different and come in their order of priority. It is
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important to empathise to be able to determine their specific needs.
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, an individual who is in dire need of financial support would appreciate a monetary
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items as clothing and other material gifts. In
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vein, it is needless to give present to an individual who is highly depressed and only needs words of encouragement and emotional support.
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, some people argue that affection and
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can only be shown by giving presents.
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set of people believe that
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act helps in fostering
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better relationships
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with relatives
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and acquaintances, especially
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Fitri. The boom in sales of
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items professing love and appreciation recorded during these periods is
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believed to be on the increase yearly. In conclusion, giving presents to
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care and
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a bad idea in its
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entirety, but
more importantly, showing empathy better demonstrates one's genuine intent in an attempt to
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affection and
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to friends and relatives.
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