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Some parents that advertisements are misleading for children, while advertisers claim that they provide knowledge. Give your opinion.

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Advertisements are
important means
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an important means
 through which most production companies market their goods.Certain parents believe that they are misleading
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while the owners said they are knowledgeable. In my opinion, some adverts are beneficial, but others could be misguiding. One good reason why some adverts are believed to be
misdirecting
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misdirected
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especially to youngsters
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is because they are minors and are motivated majorly by what they see or hear, and
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, may not be able to differentiate good from bad.
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, they are attracted by what is happening around them without considering the consequences or outcome.
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, in advertising
indomie
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Indomie
 noodles, the presenters portrayed super intelligence and smartness after consumption, and
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 singular act attracted my children, whom till date refused to eat other products.
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, these adults believe that most of these factories do not care about
positive achievements
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the positive achievements
 from the viewers/listeners, but rather are so much interested
on
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in
 their sales and income generated from their goods.
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, one of the brewery industry in Ogun State
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Nigeria, was closed down
last
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 year because of non-factual nutrients outlined on their food pack, and their environment being so unhealthy for consumable goods.
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, many displays and write-ups can be seen to be advantageous in terms of impacting knowledge to the young ones.
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, by watching the presentation and the dance steps on television, a child could learn how to dance.
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also
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 applies to reading posters or sign posts, and by
constant
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constantly
 viewing leads to memorization and learning of different words. In conclusion, despite the misdirecting effects marketing of many items may cause to some juveniles, there are certain advantages
such
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 as, enlightenment.
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