There is an increasing amount of advertising directed at children, which encourages them to buy goods such as toys and snacks. Many parents are worried that these advertisements put too much pressure on children, while some advertisers claim that they provide useful information to children. Discuss both views and giveyour opinion

Nowadays, due to burgeoning technological advances, youngsters are exposed to lots of commercials that persuades them to buy goods. What are the implications?. Some parents are concerned that these promotions mount pressure on their children while the advertisers claim that they provide crucial
informations
a message received and understood
information
to minors. Let us examine both
veiws
a way of regarding situations or topics etc.
views
voice
veils
and
profer
present for acceptance or rejection
proffer
my opinion before reaching a concrete decision. Undoubtedly, exposing children to adverts
have
Suggestion
has
certain drawbacks and parents are worried about them.
Firstly
, it makes children to become
consumerists
. To illustrate, exposing juveniles to certain adverts can make them to exhibit over possessive attitudes.
For instance
, these days adverts on toys are common. Children persuade parents to get them
such
items without thinking of the financial burden it
possess
Suggestion
possesses
to their parents.
Consequently
,
commercial
Suggestion
the commercial
could lead to
gluttony
. Children believe in what
the
people in general
they
see on television promotions not minding the dangers involved.
For example
coca cola adverts are deceptive and
this
might lead to
gluttony
on
such
products
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products, hence
hence
chronic complications that can result from
gluttony
such
diabetes and high blood pressure
arises
move upward
rises
.
Conversely
, promoters
advocates
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advocate
that they provide useful
informations
a message received and understood
information
to
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for
children through advertisements because certain adverts are educative. Some adverts
educates
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educate
minors on how to become good statesmen and how to practice good hygiene.
For instance
, the popular food brand Moko
spranga
the season of growth
sprang
promotes good hygiene cultures in juveniles.
Furthermore
, commercials can be used to create
awarness
having knowledge of
awareness
on the importance of vaccination
to
Suggestion
for
children. To illustrate, most parents get to know about the importance of vaccine through the media. A recent publication on the
Newyork time
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network, time
network time
New york time
magazine has shown that
informations
a message received and understood
information
on polio and malaria vaccines spread faster through television adverts. By and large, commercials educates and help to create awareness on
importance
Suggestion
the importance
of vaccination. From my perspective, I believe that commercials are
important
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important, however
however
certain advertisements mount
pressures
Suggestion
pressure
on
parents
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parents, therefore
therefore
, government should put checks to monitor and curtail irrelevant adverts. To
recapitualate
summarize briefly
recapitulate
, the expansion in technology has made adverts to become ubiquitous. It mounts
pressures
Suggestion
pressure
on parents because it makes children to become consumerist and
also
to result to
gluttony
.
However promoters
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However, promoters
claims adverts
is
Suggestion
are
useful because it is educative and can be used to create
awarness
having knowledge of
awareness
. I
reteriate
to say, state, or perform again
reiterate
my opinion that commercials are important and that
government
Suggestion
the government
should monitor and curtail irrelevant ones.
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