Nowadays technology is increasingly being used to monitor what people are saying and doing (for example, through cellphone tracking and security cameras). In many cases, the people being monitored are unaware that this is happening. Do you think the advantages of this development outweigh the disadvantages

In the
last
10 years, there has been an increasing amount of people who feel concerned about protecting their private life.
However
, in nowadays,
technology
is often utilised as a way of monitoring people’s activities. Yet, many people do not know that they are being monitored. In
this
essay, I shall, in a
first
part, expose the positive outcomes of
this
way of using
technology
,
then
I shall explain why they do not outweigh the negative outcomes. Many technological
firm
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firms
like Google or Facebook argue that they monitor people’s private life in order to improve the quality of their service.
For instance
, Facebook tracks down its users in
objective
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the objective
of targeting them with specific ads. According to the CEO of Facebook,
this
method increases the probability of a person being interested in purchasing a product marketed in an advertisement specifically designed for him. Henceforth, people are more likely to buy something on the Internet.
However
, I believe there are many problems behind
such
methods. Targeting potential consumers with specific ads without notifying them is, in my opinion, highly unethical.
Although
it was not its initial purpose,
technology
is now used to monitor what people do in order to increase the sales and
thus
the profits of
compagnies
an institution created to conduct business
companies
. Sadly, these
firm
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firms
do not care the fact that they purely violate the privacy of their customers. To a
larger
Suggestion
large
extent,
this
participates
to
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in
the process of dehumanisation
;
Accept space
;
indeed throughout these immoral practises men are reduced to the level of consumers. In my view, no company should be allowed to know what
are
Suggestion
is
the people’s opinion. By spying on us, these
compagnies
an institution created to conduct business
companies
violate their proper integrity. We could conclude by stating that,
although
monitoring people with
technology
might be interesting for businesses who want to increase their sales, it is still a huge threat to the people’s privacy. To a
further
extent, we could compare the use
technology
to monitor us in our society to the novel 1984 written by George Orwell in which the main character Big Brother monitors people lives thanks to drones and CCTV cameras.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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