Nowadays technology is increasingly being used to monitor what people are saying and doing (for example, through cellphone tracking and security cameras). In many cases, the people being monitored are unaware that this is happening. Do you think the advantages of this development outweigh the disadvantages

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, in nowadays,

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is often utilised as a way of monitoring people’s activities. Yet, many people do not know that they are being monitored. In

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I shall explain why they do not outweigh the negative outcomes. Many technological

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like Google or Facebook argue that they monitor people’s private life in order to improve the quality of their service.

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of targeting them with specific ads. According to the CEO of Facebook,

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method increases the probability of a person being interested in purchasing a product marketed in an advertisement specifically designed for him. Henceforth, people are more likely to buy something on the Internet.

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methods. Targeting potential consumers with specific ads without notifying them is, in my opinion, highly unethical.

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it was not its initial purpose,

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is now used to monitor what people do in order to increase the sales and

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indeed throughout these immoral practises men are reduced to the level of consumers. In my view, no company should be allowed to know what

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the people’s opinion. By spying on us, these

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violate their proper integrity. We could conclude by stating that,

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monitoring people with

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might be interesting for businesses who want to increase their sales, it is still a huge threat to the people’s privacy. To a

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to monitor us in our society to the novel 1984 written by George Orwell in which the main character Big Brother monitors people lives thanks to drones and CCTV cameras.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

In conclusion
To conclude
To summarize
Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 7.5

Complete response

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Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

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