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The Restoration of old buildings in major cities around the world costs governments billions of dollars while this money should have been used for new housing and road development.To what extent do you agree or disagree to this statement?

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T
 is an undeniable truth that with increasing economic growth
of
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by
 country
,
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,
government
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the government
 extracts the revenue to spend on deteriorated buildings and spend a mere amount on new projects.
lnstead
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Lnstead
 of completely renovating these institutions the authorities should plan for some new infrastructure
,
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,
taking
view
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the view
 that building place has no symbolic importance and is
builded
(used of soaps or cleaning agents) having a substance (an abrasive or filler) added to increase effectiveness
built
 for public need.I
am firmly agree
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firmly agree
have firmly agreed
 with
this
 statement and elucidate my view in following paragraphs. The
first
 and the foremost reason in favour of new construction is that it will cost less than to destroy and rebuild.One has to introduce more force in case to destroy a building.
This
 will cause
more economical
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more economic
 burden.
Moreover
,
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,
extra
time
 is needed for renovation purpose.So
,
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,
restoration process
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the restoration process
 is more
time
 consuming than for new construction.
In addition
 to
this
,
Accept space
,
there is wastage of material in the former process
instead
 it is always better to use that capital,
time
 and force
into
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in
 new construction.
On the other
hand if
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hand, if
 the building is a symbolic place or a Heritage
site
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site, then
then
government
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the government
 must take
care
 of the situation and decide
accordingly
 because these sites have some historical importance.
Also
,
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,
the guiding authorities is must take
care
 of public convenience like educational institutions and hospitals.These
institution
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institutions
 need proper
care
 and
also
 must be renovated
on
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in
time
. In conclusion
,
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,
I conclude that
government
 should encourage new infrastructure to get
developed but
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developed, but
also
government
 must take
care
 of historical sites and public convenience.
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