Topic: - Nowadays people spend too much time at work to the extent that they hardly have time for their personal life. Discuss

In present competitive

scenario people are

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scenario, people are

compelled to

work

for longer hours,

therefore

they have left with less

time

for their family and friends. I believe that long working hours

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are

the negative trend. Working for long hours have serious impact on our development. People might think working for long hours enhance the

productivity whereas

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productivity, whereas

it is proven that

work

over load

become overloaded

overload

causes exertion and stress in employees which reduces the productivity.

Firstly

work

over load

become overloaded

overload

is one of the major reasons of health disease in employees these days

such

as heart attack, depression, stress etc. As consequences of that employees are not able to put their full efforts in their respective office

work

Secondly

, working for

longer

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long

hours

also reduce

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are also reducing

are also reduced

is also reduced

their concentration level and interest in the

work

, on account of which they take long

time

to finish the job. According to the latest study by

World Health Organisation

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the World Health Organisation

number

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the number

of people suffering from depression increases on ground of

stressful life

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a stressful life

Moreover

, people who spend more

time

in office they get less

time

for themselves, certainly their personal and social relationships get

disruption

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disrupted

For instance

, Parents who

work

for

longer

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long

hours in office get less

time

for their children because of that they are not able to take proper care of their young ones and their emotions. By the reason children these days are not much emotionally connected to their parents as

earlier

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early

In addition

to that, nature of solitude has developed in the people and their social life has diminished. To conclude, there is absolutely nothing to prove that long working hours improve productivity. Long working hours not only reduce your capability to

work but

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work, but

also

ruin your personal emotions and family life.

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Topic: - Nowadays people spend too much time at work to the extent that they hardly have time for their personal life. Discuss

Your opinion

Car ownership has increased so rapidly over the past thirty years that many cities in the world are now one big traffic jam. How true do you think this statement is ? What measure can government take to discourage people from using their cars?

Many criminals commit further crimes as soon as they released from prison. What do you think are the causes of this? What possible solutions can you suggest?

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