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Some people think that mothers should spend most of their time raising their family, and therefore the government should support them financially. Do you agree or disagree?

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Nowdays
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Now days
,
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,
women have equal job opportunities as men
,
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,
however
 many ascertain that women and
specially
to a distinctly greater extent or degree than is common
especially
 those who have children need to stay at home and
speand
pass time in a specific way
spend
spent
spends
 a huge amount of their time raising their family
,
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,
and getting financial
support
 from the government.I totally disagree,
becauce
for the reason that; on account of
because
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
 believe that a woman can be independent and earning
money
 and at the same time being a mother. On one hand
,
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,
when a woman is not working but
instead
 staying at home raising the children that can have a positive impact to the
familly
a social unit living together
family
.
In addition
,
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,
children need someone to take care of them so a mother can
support
 them both physically and mentally
,
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,
by staying by their
side she
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side, she
 can always protect them and teach them good manners and how to behave properly.
Moreover
,
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,
in order to have a
wealth
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wealthy
 life some financial
support it
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support, it
 is needed
,
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,
government should
support
 mothers by giving them a monthly salary so they will be able to raise
ther
of them or themselves
their
the
her
 children without worrying about
money
.
On the other hand
,
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,
every woman wants to be independent
end
in order to; used instead of "to", especially after try, come, go
and
 having their own job and
money
 and be able to
support
 their family.
Therefore
,
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,
having a family is not easy and it requires a lot of
money
 to cover all the necessities
,
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,
for
this
 reason working mothers have the right to be a part of the workforce.
Consequently
,
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,
they will be able to help with the bills
,
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,
provide a
good
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better
 life quality
to
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for
 the family and
also
 have a career. In conclusion
,
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,
speanding
the act of spending or disbursing money
spending
 time with the family is
essential but
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essential, but
 in order to survive it needs financial
support
 either from the government or by
employed
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employing
 mothers.I disagree that mothers should stay home because they deserve a place in the workforce.

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