Some people think that mothers should spend most of their time raising their family, and therefore the government should support them financially. Do you agree or disagree?

Nowdays
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Now days
,
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,
women have equal job opportunities as men
,
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,
however
many ascertain that women and
specially
to a distinctly greater extent or degree than is common
especially
those who have children need to stay at home and
speand
pass time in a specific way
spend
spent
spends
a huge amount of their time raising their family
,
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,
and getting financial
support
from the government.I totally disagree,
becauce
for the reason that; on account of
because
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
believe that a woman can be independent and earning
money
and at the same time being a mother. On one hand
,
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,
when a woman is not working but
instead
staying at home raising the children that can have a positive impact to the
familly
a social unit living together
family
.
In addition
,
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,
children need someone to take care of them so a mother can
support
them both physically and mentally
,
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,
by staying by their
side she
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side, she
can always protect them and teach them good manners and how to behave properly.
Moreover
,
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,
in order to have a
wealth
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wealthy
life some financial
support it
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support, it
is needed
,
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,
government should
support
mothers by giving them a monthly salary so they will be able to raise
ther
of them or themselves
their
the
her
children without worrying about
money
.
On the other hand
,
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,
every woman wants to be independent
end
in order to; used instead of "to", especially after try, come, go
and
having their own job and
money
and be able to
support
their family.
Therefore
,
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,
having a family is not easy and it requires a lot of
money
to cover all the necessities
,
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,
for
this
reason working mothers have the right to be a part of the workforce.
Consequently
,
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,
they will be able to help with the bills
,
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,
provide a
good
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better
life quality
to
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for
the family and
also
have a career. In conclusion
,
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,
speanding
the act of spending or disbursing money
spending
time with the family is
essential but
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essential, but
in order to survive it needs financial
support
either from the government or by
employed
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employing
mothers.I disagree that mothers should stay home because they deserve a place in the workforce.

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