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The number of old people around the world is increasing dramatically. Could this have more positive or negative effects on society?

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In recent years, the proportion of senior citizens has been growing rapidly. While many people believe that
this
 brings a positive effect, whilst others believe that it is a negative occurrence. In
this
 essay I will discuss both sides
to
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of
 the topic. Through senior citizens, society is able to hold on to the connections they had
with
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in
 the past. It is through them that we are able to learn, in detail,
first
 hand accounts of past situations. As the population of elderly increase,
then
 the younger generation will able to hold onto their links to the past. Through their grandparents, they have the ability to learn about their personal history rather
then
conjunction used in comparatives
than
 learning through textbooks. In short, society will be able to hold onto and form greater connections with the history of their ancestors. The rise of increasing lifespans
have had
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has had
 negative effects on countries where
this
 is happening.
This
 is because, as people
age they
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age, they
 slowly
loose
fail to keep or to maintain; cease to have, either physically or in an abstract sense
lose
 the ability to earn a salary and
instead
 depend on the government for pensions. As the percentage increases over the years, the dependency on tax payers increases simultaneously.
This
 leads to higher tax rates, and shifts the money that could be used for education and infrastructure to providing pensions for the senior citizens.
Hence
 why many people believe that the increasing percentage of
old
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older
 people as a negative. In conclusion,
although
 people believe that through the elderly we can hold onto our links from the past, the financial aid they require could be better used for other things.
Therefore
, I believe that the growing elderly population has more negative effects on society.
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