Some students take a year off between school and university to work or travel. Do the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages ?

Certain individuals have opined that it is often better to have
one
year
off after secondary school before university either for travel or work. In my opinion
,
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,
the benefits associated with
this
cannot be compared to any advantages it might bring. Admittedly, there are some drawbacks of having a
year
gap before tertiary education.
One
of these harmful effects is the possibility of more delay than the expected as most people may not achieve their aims within the stipulated time,
thus
, leaving the brain dormant
,
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,
and
such
would lead to poor academic performance when they later start higher institution.
Furthermore
, some persons might use that period to get themselves involved in crimes and end up as far as going to jail.
Lastly
, for some females, whom if not careful
,
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,
would become pregnant out of wedlock,
thus
destroying their plans of becoming a graduate.
Over all
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Overall
, these affect only
negligible number
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a negligible number
of individuals.
Nevertheless
, despite the demerits, most students use
this
time off to acquire some skills which would go a long way in helping them throughout their
life time
the period during which something is functional (as between birth and death)
lifetime
.
For example
, I could remember that when I left college, I took about
one
year
off to go to computer training after which I started higher education
,
Accept space
,
and
this
helped me a lot.
Also
, for many that are from very poor background but aspire to become educated, it would give them
opportunity
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the opportunity
an opportunity
to work and save some money in order to support themselves in campus.
For instance
,
one
of my friends, Chike, narrated to me how he was able to support himself throughout
university
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the university
with
savings
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the savings
he made while working with
one
of the telecommunication companies after secondary education. In conclusion,
although
there are some
undoubtable
too obvious to be doubted
indubitable
disadvantages of taking a
year
off after college
,
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,
the benefits are numerous and far more important than the harmful effects.
Submitted by Esther on

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