The gap between the rich and the is increasing. What problem does this cause? What solution can you suggest?

In most countries, especially the developing and underdeveloped ones, the rich are becoming richer and the poor are becoming poorer
thus
, increasing the gap between them.
Although
there are so many problems associated with
this
, there are
also
ways to solve them. One important problem associated with
increasing gap
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the increasing gap
an increasing gap
between the
buoyant
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buoy
buoys
and the non buoyant people is unequal
accessibility
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access
to tertiary education.
For example
, in Nigeria where
tuition fee
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the tuition fee
is very high for higher institutions, only the wealthy ones could access
this
level of education thereby leaving
the low
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lower
class individuals behind.
Also
, there is reduced marriage between the two extremes as the richer parents would not accept their children's marriage to commoners.
This
is
also
obtainable in Nigeria where there is
belief
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believed
by the upper class that
such
marriage could tarnish their
images
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image
.
Lastly
, most commoners found it difficult to air their views in the society because they feel that the wealthier humans attract more audience even when they are wrong. The
first
solution to these problems is for the government to enhance free
education especially
Accept comma addition
education, especially
at
the higher
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the highest
level so that all citizens would feel equal.
This
helps to ensure that persons from poorer backgrounds still attend
tertiary institution
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a tertiary institution
tertiary institutions
.
Secondly
, massive employment if enhanced would go a long way in providing solutions, and employment should be based on
merits
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the merits
following interviews
instead
of through connections.
Finally
,
Accept space
,
the government offices should be restructured
such
that less monetary value is attached to any political position thereby making the seats available for all. In conclusion, despite the defaults associated with increasing space between the luxurious individuals and the
paupers
writing that provides information (especially information of an official nature)
papers
, there are
also
many possible and rewarding solutions.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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