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Being able to speak a foreign language is an advantage these days. Some people think that children should start learning a foreign language at primary school, while others think children should begin in secondary school. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

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As the result of
globalisation it
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globalisation, it
 has become increasingly useful to be able to speak another
language
. Many believe that elementary school children should be though another
language
, whereas others believe that
this
 will only be impactful at a later stage. Both views will be discussed before an opinion is made. A major reason for many educators to believe that primary students should learn a foreign langue, is due to
they're
of them or themselves
their
 developing brain. By learning a
language
 at a younger
age
, children are able to grasp the
language
 faster. It has been scientifically proven that learning an alternative dialect is more futile at
this
age
.
Furthermore
, a child’s interest is at their peak during
this
 time period,
therefore
 by learning a new
language
 at
this
age
 they will in turn gain an interest in continuing the
language
.
However
,
on the other hand
, others believe that the time used to learn a
language
 can be better spent to introduce more important subjects,
such
 as: literature, maths and science.
Although
, languages are advantageous in the future, it is essential that all children have their basics in maths and sciences. These skills are the foundation of their higher educational studies.
In addition
, by introducing an extra subject, it increases the school day and in turn results in students, especially younger ones, to become
demotivated
 and lose interest in
class
Suggestion
the class
. In conclusion,
although
 learning a
language
 at a younger
age
 might be advantageous in the future, it takes away from subjects which are needed for every higher educational institute.
Therefore
, I believe that another
language
 should be introduced in secondary school.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • cognitive development
  • globalized world
  • language acquisition
  • pronunciation
  • critical thinking
  • culturally aware
  • language interference
  • motivated approach
  • curriculum demands
  • natural learning abilities
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