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Every country should have a free health service, even if this means that the latest medical treatments may not be available through the service because they are too expensive. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Nowadays, some countries offer a free-of-charge healthcare service.
Although
 some expensive modern treatments will not be covered, I believe that every
country
 should provide free medical services. The main reason why countries should offer free health services is the financial factor.
This
 is because not all people can afford treatments in hospitals.
For example
, a recent survey, conducted by a team of German statisticians, has revealed that one in every twenty people in Africa cannot pay for the medical services provided by the government; since the salaries are not in a balance with the cost of living.
Thus
, the governmental authorities should financially cover not only the medical treatments, but
also
 the visits of diagnostic purposes.
In addition
, the high-end modern
cures
a motor vehicle with four wheels; usually propelled by an internal combustion engine
cars
 are only necessary in the minority of medical cases.
Furthermore
, most people go to hospitals for minor treatments, which do not require complex equipment, nor expensive treatments. To illustrate, a poll, made in 2016 in Cairo, showed that approximately eighty percent of patients visit public hospitals for
check-ups
a thorough physical examination; includes a variety of tests depending on the age and sex and health of the person
checkups
, in which no special devices are needed.
Therefore
, making the medical system free of charge does not affect the financial stability of the
country
, nor create a burden on the governmental funds. In conclusion, due to the fact that not everyone can afford medical treatment, and free-of-charge health system does not create a negative impact on the
country
's
finance
Suggestion
financial
, I strongly agree that every
country
 should offer free medical services.
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