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Should private schools receive government funding? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience

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In virtually, there are two different types of schooling where children go for
education
. One is public (
government
)
school
 and
other
any of various alternatives; some other
another
 one is
private
Suggestion
a private school
school
. Both schools are funded by
government
. In
this
 essay, I will elaborate about the reason why
government
 should not provide funds to private schools. Private
school
are
Suggestion
is
 a
school
 for
upper middle class family
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an upper middle class family
 who can easily afford donations for the admissions of their kids and ready to pay huge tuition fee, so
such
 amount is more than enough to run a
school
 and
government
 funds can be
utilize
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utilized
 for public schools where kids from poor family come for their
education
.
Moreover
,,
Suggestion
,
 private schools
follows
Suggestion
follow
 their own rules and regulation and promote their own religion values towards children.
For instance
, convert schools devote more values to Christian religion and values and avoid other cultures and make their students to be their followers. Explaining
further
, funding private schools will be unfair for the students studying in public schools, where there is scarcity of resources and by dividing
government
 funds towards dispensable schools will affect the
education
 environment and
system
Suggestion
the system
systems
 of the students belongs to impoverish family. In conclusion,
government
 should take right decision towards distributing their treasure received from taxpayer and avoid
such
 sector where there are lesser requirements of resources.
On the other hand
, they should spend funds in public schools which will give equal rights, resources and
education
 environment to all children.
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