Some argue younger people are not suitable for important positions in the government, while others think this is a good idea. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

A considerable number of people assert that young people shouldn’t hold leading positions in our countries. Others, myself included, are,
on the other hand
, opponents of the aforementioned view, claiming that
youth
represent
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represents
a better fit for leading governments. As far as I am concerned, the underlying advantages and disadvantages inherent to the brought forth prompt must be pondered upon prior to reaching a firm conclusion. On the one hand, there may be certain disadvantages associated with
youth
working in high ranked government jobs. For one thing, many young employees lack experience, owing to the fact that they were not given the adequate time necessary to gain and collect essential knowledge and experiences.
As a result
, they might not be able to handle situations which an
older more
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older, more
experienced counterpart can manage with total ease.
Furthermore
, the
youth
tend to be more reckless, because they are inherently more inclined to take risks without looking back or rethinking their decisions, which might lead to fatal, and yet possibly avoidable mistakes.
Hence
, they might put our governments and
subsequently
our countries’ welfare at risk.
On the other hand
, just as young people have flaws, they have
merits
Suggestion
merited
glare as well. In my observation, a lot of
youth
have a new insight and a fresh perspective to the world.
In other words
, their minds are loaded with innovative ideas, which
consequently
leads to a superior ability to tackle many of the problems our government face nowadays, thanks to their capability of thinking outside the box and providing smart solutions to problems that their progenitor had a hard time solving. Equally importantly, though, young people have qualities that a great deal of older people
seem
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seems
to lack. They are,
for instance
, physically and mentally more fit, and are more flexible, all of which are characteristics that not only enables them to be faster learners and more
energetic but
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energetic, but
also
offer better work performance for longer working hours and under the stressful work pressure important positions often come with. All in all, I am of
view
Suggestion
the view
that the
youth
should be given the chance to hold leading positions in our countries. I take
this
view on account in a fit of the fact that despite some disadvantages raised, the merits galore inherent to young people in higher government positions
far outweigh
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far outweighs
the aforementioned flaws.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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