Some people believe that the museums and historic sites should be open for free for children under 18. Do you agree or disagree?

Youngsters below the age of 18 are seen as minors,
thus
many people think that it is better not to charge them whenever they visit
such
places like museums and historic centres. In my opinion, offering all children free entrance would be problematic, and
therefore
should be offered to certain children. Making these art and cultural centres open without pay for under eighteen would incur so much
expenses
Suggestion
expense
to the government and the society.
This
is because if
such
is allowed, a lot of young ones would
be attracted always
Suggestion
always be attracted
to these
areas thereby
Accept comma addition
areas, thereby
leading to overcrowding, and
consequently
, causing so many damages to the facilities.
This
is because their numbers would be outrageous
thus
making them difficult to be controlled by the staffs. In order to repair the damaged structures, extra finance would be
required which
Accept comma addition
required, which
sometimes come from funds allocated to other public services.
Furthermore
, keeping these important places open without entrance fees for youngsters would make them not to attach any value to them,
thus
demoting the prestige and honour ascribed to them.
Nevertheless
, some younger chaps can be allowed to visit without paying.
For example
, in schools, certain parents found it difficult to pay their children's school fees not to talk
of
Suggestion
about
paying paying extra money for
escortion
putting a condemned person to death
execution
when required due to poverty.
Such
kids could be assessed in their various classes and those who are very intelligent and smart could be selected as a way of compensating them for their
hardwork
Suggestion
hard work
.
As a result
, poor students are encouraged to work harder in order to be included in all their school's activity. In conclusion, despite peoples' view, I still believe that allowing access to museums and historic sites without charge for younger individuals might become a burden for some countries and
thus
should be considered for few chaps.
Submitted by Esther on

Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

Examples make your writing easier to understand by illustrating points more effectively.

Examples, if used properly, not only help you get higher marks for ‘Task Response’ but also for ‘Coherence’.

When giving examples it is best to put them after your main idea or topic sentence. They can be used in the middle of supporting sentences or they can be used to start a new sentence. There is no rule for where exactly to give examples in essays, logically they would come after your main idea/topic sentence or just after a supporting sentence.

Linking words for giving examples:

  • for example
  • for instance
  • to illustrate this
  • to give a clear example
  • such as
  • namely
  • to illustrate
  • take, for example

Read more in the eBook

The Ultimate Guide to Get a Target Band Score of 7+ »

* free ebook for Premium users

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

What to do next:
Try other services:

All the services are free for Premium users