Some people believe that museums and historic sites should be open for free for children under 18. Do you agree or disagree?

Youngsters below the age of 18 are seen as minors,
thus
many people think that it is better not to charge them whenever they visit
such
places like, museums and historic sites. In my opinion, offering all children free entrance would be problematic, and
therefore
should be offered to certain minors. Making these cultural centres open without charges for under
eitheens
being one more than seventeen
eighteens
would incur so much
expenses
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expense
for the government and the society.
This
is because allowing
such
would attract lots of
children thereby
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children, thereby
resulting
to
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in
overcrowding, and
consequently
leading to
damages
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damage
to the facilities due to difficulty in controlling them by the staffs. In order to repair the damaged structures, extra money would be
needed which
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needed, which
sometimes would come from the funds to be used in other public services.
Furthermore
, leaving these sites open without entrance fee for kids makes them to
loose
fail to keep or to maintain; cease to have, either physically or in an abstract sense
lose
their
values
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values, thus
thus
, demoting the prestige ascribed to them.
Nevertheless
, few children can be granted access without pay.
For example
, in schools, certain parents found it difficult to pay tuition for their offspring not to talk about paying extra money for
such
things like,
escortion
a journey taken for pleasure
excursion
association
, due to poverty.
Therefore
, teachers could assess these poor chaps in their classes and those who prove more intelligent and smart could be selected to visit as a way of compensating them for their effort.
As a result
, the poor students are encouraged to work harder in order to be included in all the activities of their schools. In conclusion, despite peoples' view, I still believe that leaving museums and historic places without entrance charges for individuals
below
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under
18 would not be easy for
some
one or some or every or all without specification
any
countries with bad economy and could only be feasible if selected youngsters are considered.
Submitted by Esther on

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