The government should allocate more fund to the educational sector than health sector.At what extent do you agree or disagree.

#government #fund #sector #health

Government should provide financial aid to educational

sector

rather than

health

care delivery. In my own opinion, I feel the

health

sector

deserves more funding.

This

essay will pinpoint

reasons

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the reasons

Health

is wealth

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this

know

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known

to be a popular adage.

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healthy nation is a wealthy nation. Without adequate funding in the

health

care

sector many

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sector, many

citizen

Suggestion

citizens

of a national will not be able to get good

health

care and

this

can lead to detrimental effects.

For

example in

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example, in

developed countries like America where the

health

of all its members

are

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very paramount

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it can be seen that there is increased productivity in

such

countries. There is

state

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a state

of the art medical equipment to diagnose and treat any medical conditions because the

health

sector

is fully

equiped

provided or fitted out with what is necessary or useful or appropriate

equipped

.No wonder why our own politicians and the rich people in the society run abroad with any little

ailment but

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ailment, but

here in Nigeria thousands of people die yearly due to

ailment

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an ailment

that could be treated if there were to be medical equipments

On the Contrary

, failure in the educational system is

also

a failure

Suggestion

for

the economy.Ignorance they say is a disease. When the educational

sector

is left unfunded

then

we should expect an influx of illiterates in the society.

This

illetracy

ignorance resulting from not reading

illiteracy

also affect

Suggestion

also affects

health

somehow. Research has shown that

illetracy

ignorance resulting from not reading

illiteracy

has a negative impact on the

health

seeking behaviour of people.Take

for example

a person with

kidney

problem will rather take herbal

concotions

any foodstuff made by combining different ingredients

concoctions

connections

concessions

which will

further

injure the

kidney

or better still the

kidney

will pack up

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they are ignorant of the detriments of

concotions

a relation between things or events (as in the case of one causing the other or sharing features with it)

connections

concessions

to a failed

kidney

.If they were educated

this

would have been prevented.

Moreso

Suggestion

More so

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one can be educated and education will not reflect

Suggestion

the person's character or behaviour..Education is not only about going to school.

Also there

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Also, there

are alternatives to

been

the state or fact of existing

being

educated

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one can decide to learn skills rather than going to school but

health

can not be compromised. In conclusion

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education and

health

sector

requires funding by the Government

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health

sector

should be paramount because of the numerous disadvantages a failed

health

system might cause the nation.

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