Many childhood diseases can now be prevented through the use of vaccines. Should parents be made by law to immunise their children against common diseases or should individuals have the right to choose not to immunise their children?

All parents across the world, want their children to be free of illness and diseases. But with, change in environment and food habits, new diseases have been identified. Modern
healthcare
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health care
has
also
introduced drugs, immunization doses
to fight
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fight
such
problems. Today, we are blessed with the invention of many vaccines that can protect children against many common health problems and diseases.
Small pox
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Smallpox
, was a deadly disease that had caused havoc across the globe in earlier centuries. In many countries the governments, had decided to make
small pox
a highly contagious viral disease characterized by fever and weakness and skin eruption with pustules that form scabs that slough off leaving scars
smallpox
vaccination
mandatory for their citizens. I have seen
marks
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the marks
of
vaccination
on the arms of my grandparents. They said it was a painful
procedure
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procedure, then
then
and many people used to avoid getting the vaccine due to the pain. Less knowledge about it
also
stopped many from getting their children immunized. I believe imparting correct knowledge would have been more useful. Though, the world is free of
small pox
a highly contagious viral disease characterized by fever and weakness and skin eruption with pustules that form scabs that slough off leaving scars
smallpox
today, a right awareness program might have made
this
possible a little earlier.
Similarly
, polio had been a health problem that had damaged many people’s lives. In India, the Government educated the Indian citizens about polio
vaccination
through different campaigns and
have
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has finally made
finally
made India, a polio free nation. Though the immunisation was not made mandatory by law but the success rate was remarkable due to the awareness campaign that spread to very rural areas of the country. Another valid point is that, once the vaccines were subsidized or made free for the citizens of a country, the success rate increased. Often, the poor people try to avoid getting the doses as they are unable to afford the cost of it. In conclusion, I would like to say that
vaccination
need not be made mandatory by law, rather awareness, and education about immunization should be made mandatory. The governments, should
also
see that it is easily available to everyone in their respective countries and are safe to use. I believe only
then
our world will have healthy and happy children free of common diseases.
Submitted by manikkapoor4u on

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