Some students take a year off between school and University to work or travel. Do the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages?

A lot of students usually travel or work for one year before entering the higher institution. While
this
has several benefits and drawbacks
,
Accept space
,
in my opinion the drawbacks far exceed the merits. There are considerable benefits for the young
school
leavers to work before gaining admission into the
university
because
this
will enable them to gather funds for their
university
education as their parents may not be financially
bouyant
tending to float on a liquid or rise in air or gas
buoyant
to sponsor them.
Hence
,
Accept space
,
this
will solve part of the student's financial problem.
Likewise
, travelling before gaining admission create room for them to inquire about the course they are about to take in the higher institution.
Moreover
, it will increase their interest in
such
a course.
For instance
,
Accept space
,
a trip to the hospital may spur the students to study medical related courses.
However
,
Accept space
,
there are potential drawbacks for
school
leavers to travel before gaining admission into the
university
as it may take longer than a year thereby causing
delay
Suggestion
delays
for the students.
Similarly
,
Accept space
,
they may be exposed to unlawful practices
such
as drugs, prostitution to mention but a few.
Furthermore
, unwanted pregnancies may occur in female
school
leavers. Again
,
Accept space
,
the students may no longer be interested in attending
higher
Suggestion
a higher school
high school
the higher school
the high school
school
of learning when they decide to work and start earning. In conclusion
,
Accept space
,
the drawbacks to students travelling or working before entering
university
seem to outweigh the benefits as the young
school
leavers may not be interested in attending higher institution and the may partake in illegal practices.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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