Some People think that using animals for food and transportation should be completely banned. On the other hand, other people believe that using animals for meat and experiments is fair. Discuss both the views and give your own opinion

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Nowadays, for the sake of convenience, the animals are being exploited regularly by humans in a plethora of ways. People’s opinions differ as to whether the animals should be used or not. I
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accord with the strong arguments against the
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use
of animals for commercial purposes. There are umpteen harmful effects on the animals when they are utilized for the domestic purposes.
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and foremost reason for banning
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the usage
of animals is animal cruelty. There are myriad of animals which are killed for the purpose of
food
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. People sometimes overuse domestic animals by overloading them with heavy materials like bricks. They are not even given proper
food
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to eat which leads to the deterioration of their health.
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, some laboratories for medicines and cosmetic products perform dangerous experiments on various animals and even use their bones in medicines and beauty products
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, killing animals for meat is not completely wrong, if there is no meat, people will
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leave
only with the option of eating vegetables and which will impact our
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chain. As there is a limited supply of crops and
vegetables which
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vegetables, which
cannot
fulfill
put in effect
fulfil
the demand and supply requirement of everyone.
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will cause a disastrous impact like
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as there will be scarcity of
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. Some places like rural areas does not even have proper transportation facilities like cars, buses
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and people have to rely only on the animals to travel from one place to another.
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, In India, there are many villages where there is the scarcity of transportation and people use cow carts for their travel. To encapsulate, using animals has some
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positives, but
its negatives outweigh but banning them is not a solution. So, the government should formulate some regulatory authorities in order to keep the check on the commercial and domestic usage of animals to avoid their exploitation.
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