Some people think that too much money has been spent looking after and repairing old buildings, so we should knock down old buildings and build modern ones instead. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

A group of people has come up with a moot point that old buildings should not be repaired and renovated but
instead
, demolished and new
one
constructed with more amenities and stores to accommodate more number of families with extra comfort. I completely agree with the innovative idea, to support
it I
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it, I
shall enumerate some arguments. Admittedly, old buildings are constructed in traditional ways which have
one
or two floors which can accommodate maximum two families.
However
, latest skyscrapers can facilitate more people.
Additionally
, properly planned and engineered new buildings consume less
space
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space, thus
thus
, extra space can be used as parking or for gardens. Apartments are
one
of the examples of multi-story buildings in urban areas.
In addition
to
this
, modern buildings are built with many technological gadgets like fire alarm and security cameras. Nowadays, these machineries are
become
Suggestion
becoming
crucial for any building in metropolitan cities. Modern buildings are designed and constructed with these facilities. Apart from
this
, some commercial complex and houses are built with
in-built
existing as an essential constituent or characteristic
inbuilt
solar system, which is again helpful to save electricity.
On the other hand
, repairing and maintaining heritage and cultural building is
also
necessary.
Such
buildings provide identity to the place.
Also it
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Also, it
helps in developing tourism and generating a revenue to the Government and local suppliers.
For example
, Taj Mahal,
one
of the seven wonders, is landmark for India and thousands of tourist visit there every year. In conclusion, looking to the advantages offered by modern multi-story construction, I reiterate that old residential and commercial buildings should be
knock
Suggestion
knocked
down to construct new ones more floors and security system.
Submitted by Serhio Baraniuk on

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