Some people think that too much money has been spent looking after and repairing old buildings, so we should knock down old buildings and build modern ones instead. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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A group of people has come up with a moot point that old buildings should not be repaired and renovated but

instead

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, demolished and new

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constructed with more amenities and stores to accommodate more number of families with extra comfort. I completely agree with the innovative idea, to support

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it, I

shall enumerate some arguments. Admittedly, old buildings are constructed in traditional ways which have

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or two floors which can accommodate maximum two families.

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, latest skyscrapers can facilitate more people.

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, properly planned and engineered new buildings consume less

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space, thus

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, extra space can be used as parking or for gardens. Apartments are

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of the examples of multi-story buildings in urban areas.

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this

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, modern buildings are built with many technological gadgets like fire alarm and security cameras. Nowadays, these machineries are

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becoming

crucial for any building in metropolitan cities. Modern buildings are designed and constructed with these facilities. Apart from

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, some commercial complex and houses are built with

in-built

existing as an essential constituent or characteristic

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solar system, which is again helpful to save electricity.

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, repairing and maintaining heritage and cultural building is

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necessary.

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buildings provide identity to the place.

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helps in developing tourism and generating a revenue to the Government and local suppliers.

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, Taj Mahal,

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of the seven wonders, is landmark for India and thousands of tourist visit there every year. In conclusion, looking to the advantages offered by modern multi-story construction, I reiterate that old residential and commercial buildings should be

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knocked

down to construct new ones more floors and security system.

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Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
Sentence 3 - Thesis
Sentence 4 - Outline sentence

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Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
Sentence 2 - Example
Sentence 3 - Discussion
Sentence 4 - Conclusion

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Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
Sentence 2 - Example
Sentence 3 - Discussion
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 5.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 5.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

6.5

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

5 paragraphs

266 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

Preservation
Restoration
Demolition
Architectural heritage
Cultural significance
Tourist attraction
Urban landscape
Sustainability
Conservation
Economic benefits
Historical landmarks
Urban renewal
Infrastructure
Maintenance costs
Modern amenities
Building regulations
Community identity
Heritage conservation

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Some people think that too much money has been spent looking after and repairing old buildings, so we should knock down old buildings and build modern ones instead. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Fully explain your ideas

Some cities create housing areas by providing taller buildings. Others create housing by building houses on a wider area of land. What solution is better?

The idea of having a single career is becoming an old fashioned one. The new fashion will be to have several careers or ways of earning money and further education will be something that continues throughout life. To what extent do you agree?

Many supermarkets are selling more and more products that are imported from other countries instead of selling food that is locally sourced. What are the reasons for this? Is this a positive or negative development?

More and more people are relying on the private car as their major means of transportation. Describe some of the problems over-reliance on cars can cause, and suggest at least one possible solution.

Childhood obesity is an increasing problem in Australia as many as two thirds of children are now obese. Schools have a responsibility to monitor what their students eat and the amount of exercise they do. To what extend do you agree to this statement?