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Some people believe the aim of university education is to help graduates get better jobs. Others believe there are much wider benefits of university education for both individuals and society. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Tertiary
education
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 is
one
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 of the most colossal achievement
one
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 can have. Some school of thoughts think the purpose of
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 system is assist baccalaureates in getting a job, while
other
plural of other; the people or things not already mentioned
others
 believe there are much broader advantages for
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 and the public in general.
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 essay will look at
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this arguments
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this argument
these arguments
 in details. 
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 with, those who assume that
university
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education
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 is solely for easy employability, do so because most employers of
labor
a social class comprising those who do manual labor or work for wages
labour
 are looking for individuals who are
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 educationally.
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, most parents want their children to become medical doctors because
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 profession easily gets hired.
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, job security is the main reason they envisage
one
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 should go to the
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.
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, people with secondary school
education
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 only, don’t get paid as much as those with college degrees.
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, I am convinced that higher
education
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 is for the development of an individual’s mental sagacity and to enable him find solutions to the problems In the world.
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 is because the tutelage obtained
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at
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 tertiary institutions helps
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 learn principles and laws that will help a person make
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informed
 decisions in his life and
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 help him embark on research that will provide answers to the needs of man.
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, a research done by Harvard
university
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 discovered that the greatest contributors to the advancement of the communities in terms of science and technology were graduates.
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, the society we live in today will not be possible without the knowledge and experience
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this
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these
 individuals gained from the universities.    In conclusion,
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 essay has looked at two controversial opinions about the aim of
university
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education
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. In my opinion, it is a harbinger for individual and societal development rather than to secure a good job.
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