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Some people feel that the design of newly constructed buildings in big cities should be controlled by government. others believe those who financed the construction of a building should be free to design it as they fit. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

#people #design #buildings #cities #government #construction
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The beauty and pleasant scenery in big cities is because of the development of new buildings.
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, there is need to monitor and regulate the building of
this
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 infrastructure, for safety of life and property.
meanwhile some
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Meanwhile, some
Meanwhile some
 are of the opinion that the
government
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 should oversee the
construction
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 of the new buildings while others think the individuals who financed the
construction
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 should design it according to their taste. I personally feel that the
government
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 should be in charge of the new buildings. The
construction
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 of
new building
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new buildings
the new building
a new building
 should be adequately monitored and
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 can only be possible when they're a team of expert who have the professional qualification for
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 task. The
government
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 is able to finance the team, recruit competent staffs and ensure that the standards are met.
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, when individuals are allowed to design it as it pleases them, the 10 to build according to their
wishes which
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wishes, which
 in most cases might not abide by the standard precautionary measures. Substandard products may be used, inappropriate parliament and dangerous edifices may be constructed.
as
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As
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 may
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threat
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a threat
 to the neighbouring buildings and the public in general. To conclude, I am of the opinion that the
government
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 should take charge of the
construction
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 of
new building
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new buildings
a new building
, because it ensures the certainty that standard measures and due process will be followed.
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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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  • Accessibility
  • Environmental sustainability
  • Investors
  • Developers
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  • Iconic buildings
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  • Balanced approach
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