4. Some people say that feeling of competition should be encouraged in children others say they should be taught to become cooperative. What is your opinion?

Children are the tender buds of the society and they are required to be taught true values of life.
Therefore
, some people tend to believe that feeling of
competition
should be infused in them while others believe that the possession of cooperative values are required for them. I will discuss the merits and demerits of
both
aspects before reaching to any opinion.
To begin
with, there are many reasons why children should be having
competional
of or involving computation or computers
computational
values?
Firstly
,
competition
motivates youngsters to accelerate their efforts to attain higher level in education and in other activities. They start doing work hard to compete with others and understand the value of hard work.
This
dedication and hard work help them to stand
first
everywhere.
Secondly
,
competional
of or involving computation or computers
computational
compositional
values inculcate self-confidence and self-independence in children. When they participate in activities and compete others, they are more likely to have
feeling
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feelings
a feeling
the feeling
of self-achievement and
fulfillment
a feeling of satisfaction at having achieved your desires
fulfilment
. They feel themselves worthy that provide them balanced and peaceful mind. They tend to become self-reliant and that result in
best
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better
decision talking ability in them.
Moreover
,
sense
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a sense
the sense
of completion is the need of the hour. Undoubtedly, in
modern era
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the modern era
, people
since
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from
their childhood till adults, face
completion
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completion, for
for example
- in school there
are
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is
dance
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a dance competition
competition
,
race
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race, competition
competition
, poem
competition and
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competition, and
when they
grow
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are grown
adults, they face
competition
in taking
job
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the job
, while taking admission in college and even face competitive in exam.
Thus
, value is highly required.
On the other hand
, it is needless to say that how important is it to inculcate the value of cooperation.
This
is the only feeling by which a child can learn teamwork, team spirit,
co-existence
existing peacefully together
coexistence
, tolerance and patience.
Moreover
, if the history is
seen it
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seen, it
becomes quite evident that the well-known icons of the society are only those who had a helping and sacrificing attitude. A self-
centered
being or placed in the center
centred
human being cannot earn fame in society.
Secondly
, incessant preaching for
competition
may
results
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result
in rivalry feeling for peer group and others. These rivalry feelings take no time in turning
in to
expresses motion to a point on, or within, something
into
jealous and personal grudges. A heart full of jealous
for
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of
others can never hold well for themselves and for others. To conclude, after gauging
both
,
competitional
a business relation in which two parties compete to gain customers
competition
and cooperative values, I feel that
both
values have its own importance.
Thus
, a child should be brought up by imparting
both
equally.
Submitted by rajvardhanmpatil on

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