Vaccinating children against preventable diseases is not only unnecessary but also dangerous. To what extent do you agree or disagree.

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Nowadays, one of the topical issues in medicine is the recurring debate on whether infants and younger ones should be vaccinated or not. Many are of the school of thought that
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phenomenon is deadly and uncalled for while others believe in the necessity of immunizing children especially immediately they are
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essay, I completely disagree with the former because
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is a measure to prevent imminent diseases that could eventually lead to death, and
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, should be encouraged. To start with, administering vaccines to children especially, the newly born, is essential to forestall possible potential diseases that affect children right from childhood. Diseases
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as yellow fever and convulsion are better prevented via vaccines taken especially between one to three months after a child is born as these
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seem to be incurable once the child grows to a certain age. As an example, the child mortality rate in Nigeria in the past two decades compared to now has declined significantly. From the report released by the Federal Ministry of Health in 2018, the statistics of infant death revealed an amazing 70% decrease between
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, due to accompanying complications that might ensue from immunization, people at the other side of the divide are of the opinion that giving
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should be abolished. To
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class of people, encouraging
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is as good as administering
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euthanasia, which
eventually leads to health deterioration and ultimately, death. But
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, statistics show that people with
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mind-set are majorly rural dwellers who have less access to medical professionals and healthcare facilities. Conclusively, the importance of
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in children in considerably limiting the incidence of infant mortality cannot be over-emphasised in our world today, but,
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has to be carried out by trained medical professionals in order to forestall impending health challenges in the future.
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