Some people say that teachers should be paid according to how their students learn. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Teacher
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's are considered an important
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vessel
in our
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educational
life who develop students right from elementary to post graduate level. Some people believed that teachers should be
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earned
earning
based on how their students learn.
This
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essay will argue why teachers should not be paid according to their students' performance.
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with, it is believed by some people that teachers' remuneration should commensurate with how much their students learn. Indeed,
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is to let them work hard for what they earned, and perhaps, to reduce laziness at work. A
teacher
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,
for instance
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, who teaches her students what she felt rather than what the students needed to know, out of laziness, will eventually earn the same salary with the
teacher
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who utilized every teaching skill in order to carry all her students along, irrespective of their learning ability. These
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prompted those people to say teachers should be paid based on what their students learn.
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, teachers' salary should not be paid according to how their students learn, those learners would be unjustifiably mounted unnecessary pressure to learn faster and score higher in test and exams, without considering their learning pace and intellectual capacity.
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become
less interesting to those students.
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, my mathematics
teacher
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in high school was a brilliant and knowledgeable man, who always made his class interesting and fun to learn,
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the majority
of us were able to perform
exellently
extremely well
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well in his subject while some few students still find it difficult to comprehend because of their slow learning speed, despite
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, my
teacher
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can never be paid less because of them. On the whole,
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essay argued why teachers should be paid according to how their students learn. I'm of the opinion that teachers' remuneration should not be based on how their students learn.
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