Many people try to look younger than their age. What are the reason people do this? Do you think this is a good thing or a bad thing?

As we grow day-by-day, we get old sick and weak.
This
leads to the act of being outcasted for certain people from
certain age group
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a certain age group
.
Couple
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A couple
of decades ago
this
, People were open to accept
aging but
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aging, but
now-a-days it is not
samilar
marked by correspondence or resemblance
similar
. They feel
embarassed
feeling or caused to feel uneasy and self-conscious
embarrassed
to accept the fact that as the time passes, they grow old. Aging is nothing but just the process to become old. Is it good or not
?
Accept space
?
I
depends
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depend
on
ones
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one's
thoughts. Some think that aging is a bad thing and try to fight with it mentally and scientifically. Resistance of it brings
lot
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lots
of challenges
for
example many
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example, many
actresses undergoes facial surgeries to look
young
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younger
, some
alter
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alters
their jaw line while other alter their lips.
This
gets worse when
womens
an adult female person (as opposed to a man)
women
modify their body structure to look attractive.
This
is not just limited to
womens
an adult female person (as opposed to a man)
women
, men
also
work hard to look better and younger. On one hand women alter their appearance while
on the other hand
men alter
thieir
of them or themselves
their
health by eating
lot
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lots
of unhealthy
suppliment
add as a supplement to what seems insufficient
supplement
supplements
and workout to develop good physique.
This
not even bring bad
result but
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result, but
also
worse the situation before
time
objective case of they
them
.
On the other
hand their
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hand, there
hand there
are some people or to be precise, some artists who
embrase
include in scope; include as part of something broader; have as one's sphere or territory
embrace
embraced
embraces
it. There are some sportsmen are
also
their
in or at that place
there
in
this
list
for example
Milind
somkar
, an actor of Indian origin turns out to be a sportsman and won titles like Ironman
etc
and on being asked about their age, they always tend to accept openly as they accepted the change from childhood to being young adults.
This
does boost the confidence and accepting
this
stage brings out more
responsibilties
the social force that binds you to the courses of action demanded by that force
responsibilities
responsibility
towards self. In my opinion, accepting the fact of aging is a good idea and skipping the approaches to look young will give you a new stage of life and working on to look young will give nothing but harm to ones body and mental peace.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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