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If countries are serious about solving traffic problems, they should tax private cars heavily and use the money to provide free or very cheap rail travel. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement.

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Private cars should be taxed seriously, if nations want to really solve traffic issues. Funds generated from
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 should be used to provide affordable alternative
such
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 as
rail
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. I strongly agree with
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 notion because
firstly
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,
rail
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 transport can
covary
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 more commuters at once.
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secondly
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Secondly
, the
maintenance
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 is cheaper and affordable.
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 with, the number of passengers that can be transported at once by train is enormous as
such
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 there will be
drastic reduction
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a drastic reduction
 in the figure of
road
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 users. Since heavy taxes on private
car
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 ownership will reduce the extent at which individuals own or use their cars, the
road
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 will be free from
grid lock
a traffic jam so bad that no movement is possible
gridlock
. In 2002, when private
car
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 owners were taxed heavily and commuters used
rail
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 as a means of transportation; the grid lock statistics plummeted within a year in China.
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, the
maintenance
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 cost for
rail
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 transport is by far less to that of
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road
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the road
. The cost of maintaining
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road
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the road
roads
 is high because of the frequent repair required by it. While rolling stock infrastructures require less periodic
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maintenance there
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maintenance, there
 is
need
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a need
 for constant repair of drainages, bridges and
road
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 surface
maintenance
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 which comes with very high cost. The use of private
car
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 taxes to provide
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 alternative means of transportation will reduce government spending on these roads. To conclude, for nations that are committed to resolving traffic challenges, I strongly agree that taxing private
car
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 owners and utilizing the funds to provide free or very affordable
rail
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 transport is a great way of doing so.
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