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If countries are serious about solving traffic problems, they should tax private cars heavily and use the money to provide free or very cheap rail travel. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement.

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Private cars should be taxed seriously, if nations want to really solve traffic issues. Funds generated from
this
 should be used to provide affordable alternative
such
 as
rail
. I strongly agree with
this
 notion because
firstly
,
rail
 transport can
covary
 more commuters at once.
secondly
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Secondly
, the
maintenance
 is cheaper and affordable.
To begin
 with, the number of passengers that can be transported at once by train is enormous as
such
 there will be
drastic reduction
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a drastic reduction
 in the figure of
road
 users. Since heavy taxes on private
car
 ownership will reduce the extent at which individuals own or use their cars, the
road
 will be free from
grid lock
a traffic jam so bad that no movement is possible
gridlock
. In 2002, when private
car
 owners were taxed heavily and commuters used
rail
 as a means of transportation; the grid lock statistics plummeted within a year in China.
Furthermore
, the
maintenance
 cost for
rail
 transport is by far less to that of
road
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the road
. The cost of maintaining
road
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the road
roads
 is high because of the frequent repair required by it. While rolling stock infrastructures require less periodic
maintenance there
Accept comma addition
maintenance, there
 is
need
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a need
 for constant repair of drainages, bridges and
road
 surface
maintenance
 which comes with very high cost. The use of private
car
 taxes to provide
this
 alternative means of transportation will reduce government spending on these roads. To conclude, for nations that are committed to resolving traffic challenges, I strongly agree that taxing private
car
 owners and utilizing the funds to provide free or very affordable
rail
 transport is a great way of doing so.
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