"The idea of having a single career is becoming old fashioned. The new fashion will be to have several careers or ways of making money and further education will be something that continues throughout life. Do you agree with this?

In the recent times, people are increasingly expressing their interest to choose multiple career options and it has become a new trend
.
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.
However
, choosing single career option was followed in the past.
Moreover
, commuters are
concern
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concerned
about earning decent money by continuing
further
studies and
some times
on certain occasions or in certain cases but not always
sometimes
it
contiues
continue a certain state, condition, or activity
continues
throughout their
life
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lives
. I strongly believe that
this
would be a good initiative and I will elucidate my stand in the following paragraphs. To commence with, opting for several choices in life widens the person’s horizons.
In other words
, it
assist
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assists
them to choose whatever they want.
In addition
, it broadens the thoughts and perspectives about different fields and allowing them to update their skills. To exemplify
this
,
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,
I would consider the example of John
snow who
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Snow, who
Snow who
is an epidemiologist,
biostatistician
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Biostatistician
and a dentist. Whenever he formulates a hypothesis or a
principle it
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principle, it
would be comprehensible to the general population and universally acceptable.
This
clarifies that having knowledge about different disciplinarians have definitely advantageous.
Furthermore
,
multicareer
approach sharpens the skills of the commuters and teach them multi tasking. As we are living in a globalized world where many things are happening at
single point
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a single point
of time and
this
approach definitely have
great impact
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a great impact
on personality development.
More over
in addition
Moreover
, multi tasking plays a vital role in any field.
In addition
,
job market
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the job market
is giving preference to the people who are having these qualities.
For instance
, an article published in the economic times revealed that an MNC has given priority to the people who were having multiple degrees in their jobs and it agreed that these people are worth for their company.
On the contrary
, learning different subjects involves
lot
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a lot
of motivation and time management. Nowadays people are taking
lot
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lots
of stress and work pressure for small things. Even though it occurs in small population sometimes it may have detrimental effects. To put in a
nut shell
the shell around the kernel of a nut
nutshell
, I pen down by saying that
although
there are few disadvantages of choosing several options in career
,
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,
these are negligible. I conclude by saying that holding different careers
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is always having
has always had
always has
an edge.
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