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In many parts of the world, there is not enough food for everyone. What do you think are the causes of this ? What solutions can you suggest?

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It is obvious that
food
 shortages being on the rise
is
Suggestion
are
 a deteriorating
problem
 in today's
world
. Millions of people struggling with
hunger
 every day can be attributed to two main reasons:
poverty
 and climate change.
This
 essay will discuss these two causes and look at some solutions to the issue. The primary cause of
hunger
 in some parts of the
world
 is
poverty
. The largest group of people in the
world
 in extreme
poverty
are
Suggestion
is
 smallholder farmers in developing countries who do not have the land to grow enough
food
 to feed themselves.
Moreover
, so little their income is that they cannot afford to purchase
food
 from other sources once their own supply runs out. In order to tackle
this
problem
, the governments should adopt some policies and raise funds to support people in
poverty both
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poverty, both
 with the farming infrastructure and their qualities of life. Another major reason for
food
 shortages must be climate change, which is mainly a consequence of human activities. It is undeniable that farmland around the
world
 is endangered every day with the alarming frequency of droughts and flash floods. While the agricultural production must increase rapidly to keep pace with population growth, with
this
 decreasing trend in cultivated surface, more and more people will continue to suffer from
hunger
 and the
problem
 will be even worse as well. Dealing with
this
problem
 requires every global citizen to stop damaging the environment and find ways to save the farmland by adopting state-of-the-art cultivating methods and up to date technology. To conclude, it seems to me that
poverty
 and environmental problems are the key factors behind
hunger
 around the globe. Possible solutions would involve better funding and
also
 innovations in ways of cultivating to reduce the effects of
this
 global issue.
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