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It is becoming increasingly popular to have a year off between finishing school and going to university. What are the advantages and disadvantages.

#year #school #university
It is
thought
impart skills or knowledge to
taught
 by some students that taking a
year
 off between finishing their school and going to university is important.
This
 notion has both its advantages and disadvantages for the students. Taking a
year
 off, will give students some
time
 to think about their career. They will have
time
 to explore themselves, to know what they really want to do in life and
accordingly
 they can make choices for their future.
Secondly
,
this
 will
also
 give them more
time
 to explore the universities they want to study in, and will give them an option to look for alternatives.
This
 way they will be more clear about their choices and more confident in what they are going to do. It will
also
 give them some
time
 to take off the academic pressure and refresh their minds for the
next
 chapter of their lives.
On the other hand
, taking a
year
 off means taking
time
 of their studies,
this
 will lead them to
loose
fail to keep or to maintain; cease to have, either physically or in an abstract sense
lose
 concentration and they might not be able to
catchup
Suggestion
catch up
 when they join the university. Some of them might have already started doing a job, which may impact the
next
 choices they make. They would want to continue doing the same job and leave their education at university or get more education related to that particular job.
For example
, as a student we may have different dreams
to
Suggestion
of
 what we want to do in life, but once we start earning money, we forget our dreams and set our minds to the jobs that exist around us and
hence
 we
loose
fail to keep or to maintain; cease to have, either physically or in an abstract sense
lose
 the dreams and innovation to do something different, which is a large disadvantage to ourselves and to the society. In conclusion, taking a
year
 off has its advantages and disadvantages, and it depends on person to person how they are going to utilize
this
. If one is not clear about the decision, he/she can go for proper career counselling to decide the same.
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