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Many children are encouraged to do part time work by parents? What are the advantages and disadvantages?

#children #part #time #work #parents
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It is believed that most of the children are persuaded by their parents to do any
part
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time
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work
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. The primary advantage of working as a
part
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time
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 for children is to get financial help for
thier
of them or themselves
their
 studies which minimize the overburden of parents for paying their tuition fees and The main disadvantage is that they may get distracted from their studies which can have a devastating consequences on their future.
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, taking a
part
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time
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job
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 will make them to become better adept to
fiancial
involving financial matters
financial
 management in
future
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the future
. Since they are the only one to manage their money, they can easily prioritise the things to buy. As education is very expensive at present times, students can contribute to their tuition fees by doing any
part
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time
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job
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.
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This is
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This, is
 turn, will lessen the burden on their parents.
Last
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 but not the least, these
part
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time
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 jobs may provide vocational training and real
time
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 experience
to
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for
children which
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children, which
 helps students to secure a good
job
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 after their studies.To exemplify, a recent survey conducted by
placement cell
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the placement cell
 presents that placement rate is
high
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higher
 in those students who already have
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part
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a part time
time
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job
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 experience along with their studies. On the flip side,
part
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time
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work
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 can divert the mind of students from education and they lean more towards money.
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, the hectic schedule of
work
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 and
job
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 make them stressful and they get
haywired
informal or slang term for mentally irregular
haywire
 while trying to balance between
job
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 and
work
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.
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, their exam grades get effected.
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Furthermore they
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Furthermore, they
 are not mature enough to choose the right company, there is a high probability that they may fall in bad company at their workplace. In conclusion,
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 working
part
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time
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 can help students to overcome the financial burden from their studies, it makes difficult for them to maintain a proper balance between
work
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 and education
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