You are going away to travel for the summer. A friend will be looking after your house while you are away. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter: 1)Say where you are going 2)Describe your house 3)Explain some of the things your friend must do to look after your house.

Dear Mene, I trust you are keeping up fine and the new project is going on well. I am writing to inform you that I will be travelling for a 3 weeks vacation by Saturday. I have been planning a take a break from work and my regular life, and I
finally
decided to visit California, USA for the holiday. I will be staying at the Hallmark beach house for 3 weeks where I intend to relax and put my head together after the stressful season at work, I hear the environment is
mind blowing
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. As you are aware, I moved away from Ibidun street to Randle close, it's just 3 junctions away from my previous street. It's number 15 Randle close, a brown 2 storey building
next
to the popular Assemblies of God Church. My flat is the
first
on the left once you enter the compound. While I'm away, I'll need your assistance in checking up on my cat Mikey, she
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my balcony and goes out early by 6am to play and comes back at around 8pm. Please help me put clean water in her pan every night and
also
help me warm my car at least three times
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a week so as to preserve the battery. I will drop my keys with my security guard so you can pick
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from him, I'd
also
inform him to you will be coming. Please reach out to me once you receive my letter so I can finalize my plans. Best regards,
Opum
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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

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I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

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