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Plastic shopping bags contribute to the pollution of land and sea. Some people think they should be banned. Do you agree or disagree ?

#plastic #bags #pollution #land #sea #people
Plastic is one of those elements produced by
mankind which
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mankind, which
 is causing serious damage to
environment
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the environment
. Especially shopping bags are the ones which are polluting
air
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the air
 and water rigorously. The debate on
this
 topic is hot now-a-days as some believe that it should be banned while others are so habitual of using plastic, that they support for it. I agree with the decision to ban the use of it and there are multiple reasons to support it. Plastic take a huge amount of time to decompose within the range of 10 to 1000 years.
This
 is a big time leap and the speed by which it is produced daily, it will take no less than 50000 years to decompose if we stop manufacturing it today immediately. The main reason of stopping it is because when we burn it, it emits various
poisionous
having the qualities or effects of a poison
poisonous
 gases which are not just impacting the atmosphere but
also
 damaging Ozone layer. Not just the air but
land
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the land
 is
also
 not safe from it. Burning of it destroys the soil's fertility of that entire place. It is involved in our day-to-day life so much that we use it in almost everything in
entire day
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an entire day
the entire day
.
For
example if
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example, if
 we buy a phone from a shop we get shopping bag along with it.
Similarly if
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Similarly, if
 we visit stores to buy groceries
then
 we get another bag made of plastic to carry it even if we buy coffee to
drink we
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drink, we
 get it in a plastic cup which we can carry anywhere. All these bags
ends
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end
 up
to
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in
 the sea and damage the marine habitats. In my opinion, the production and usage should be banned and stopped immediately and alternative should be used as soon as possible to preserve and restore
this
 planet.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • detrimental
  • non-biodegradable
  • pollution
  • biodegradable
  • sustainable
  • mitigate
  • ecosystem
  • recycling
  • reusable
  • environmental impact
  • eco-friendly
  • implementation
  • convenient alternatives
  • enforcement
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