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Some people believe that school children should not be given homework by their teachers, whereas others argue that homework plays an important role in the education of children. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

#people #school #children #homework #teachers #role #education
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Some argue that
school
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 teachers should not assign any
homework
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 to their students, while there are others who believe that it is important for a child’s education.
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homework
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 plays a very beneficial role in improving children academically, it does not give them enough
time
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 to pursue extra-curricular activities for self-development. On the one hand, people believe that
homework
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 improves academic results of students. If a student continuously practices the content taught to him in
school
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, he will be able to memorize and use it easily.
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, according to a survey conducted by the Indian Education Council, 60% of students who topped their class attributed their success
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in
 completing
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 assigned to them by their teachers.
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, I do not agree with
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 view because it is important for children not to be involved in
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 work all the
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 and do other extra-curricular activities, which helps
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 develop their overall personality.
On the other hand
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, many believe that assigning
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 after
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 is detrimental
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 a child’s development. A student spends a substantial amount of
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 at
school
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 during the day, and If he is forced to do additional assignments at home, he will not have
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 to pursue other interests,
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 as sports and hobbies, which are equally important for a child’s overall growth. To illustrate, when a child plays sports with his friends, he learns the art of
team work
cooperative work done by a team (especially when it is effective)
teamwork
 and mutual respect, which is impossible to acquire simply by reading books. I believe that
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 view is valid because students can learn a lot of “life-lessons” from these interests, and in the long run, have a positive effect on their lives. In conclusion,
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homework
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 helps in improving a child’s academic result, there are other aspects of development which are equally important, and children need to be given free
time
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 to pursue them.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Instills discipline
  • Deepen understanding
  • Independent learning
  • Reinforcement
  • Parental involvement
  • Curriculum insight
  • Burnout
  • Student stress
  • Leisure time
  • Relevance of assignments
  • Project-based learning
  • Interactive learning
  • Individual learning styles
  • Conducive study environment
  • Homework policy
  • Balanced approach
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