The idea of having a single career is becoming old fashioned. The new fashion will be to have several careers or ways of making money and further education will be something that continues throughout life. Do you agree with this?

In today’s world, it is very important to have knowledge in multiple fields of interest as it helps oneself to have more than
one
way of earning money because of increasing competition. Due to continuous development in technology and science, it becomes necessary for people working in these areas to keep learning new things throughout their life, so their knowledge does not become outdated. Earlier, people use to learn and develop their career by focusing on just
one
field
of study as it was enough for them to make their living throughout their
life
Suggestion
lives
.
However
, with increasing competition and
highly dynamic economy
Suggestion
the highly dynamic economy
, it is required for people to find out different ways of earning other than their main job.
This
not only makes them and their family financially stable, but it
also
secures them in case their company decides to lay-off people or close it completely.
In addition
to that,
one
should keep learning new things in their
field
of interest by either taking up any of the widely available online courses or through other means like trainings and seminars which are more aligned with their career. The
field
of technology,
for example
, is growing at
such
a high pace during
last few decades
Suggestion
the last few decades
, that it becomes mandatory for people to keep learning about new developments happening in their
field
every few years. If
one
doesn’t keep themselves updated, he/she might have a hard time to continue working in their current job as things will get outdated.
As a result
, I completely agree
of
Suggestion
about
on
having a single
career becoming
Accept comma addition
career, becoming
old fashioned for
current generation
Suggestion
the current generation
. To overcome the financial problems and make
one
’s job secured, people should develop new skills to be able to work in other areas and keep themselves up to date with
latest trends
Suggestion
the latest trends
in their
field
of study.
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