In recent years, children have been given more freedom than in the past. Do you think this is a positive and negative development?

In the past, youngsters used to follow their
parent
Suggestion
parents
wherever they go and does everything their parents order them to.
However
, there are few research studies shows evidences that proof that children should be given the opportunity to do things freely and not to be cornered by their parents as
this
will
further
stimulates
Suggestion
stimulate
their mind.
Although
, there might be some drawbacks to
this
notion,
however
, I believe that the pros will outweigh the cons and will be discussed in
this
essay. Allowing the children to feel some sense of freedom will definitely help them to express themselves better.
First
of all, they are able to do activities of their interest independently,
thus
becoming more independent and increase their level of confidence. In
this
way, they will learn to be more responsible with their actions and in turn, helps them to become a mature person.
For example
, even if a child makes a mistake during solving a problem, allowing them to find the solution by themselves will
stimulates
Suggestion
stimulate
their mind even if it takes time.
Nevertheless
, helicopter parents who does everything for the child causing the child to lose
trust
Suggestion
the trust
of themselves that they are capable of doing something.
Therefore
, they tend to shy away when there are hurdles or challenges that they have to face as they grew older.
Moreover
, creative thinking and imagination will be at loss as these parents never give them the chance for them to do it alone.
On the other hand
, there are
few setbacks
Suggestion
a few setbacks
to
this
freedom type method of parenting. Without proper parents supervision, some
children especially
Accept comma addition
children, especially
teenagers tend to do activities that can be risky and even detrimental
for
Suggestion
to
the society. For
instances
Suggestion
instance
, those involved in
vandalism
Suggestion
the vandalism
and drug abuse are usually teenagers that have too much space from their parents. What is even worse, some parents are not aware of the adolescent’s doing.
Therefore
, strict discipline and feasible boundaries need to be set in order the young from
roam
Suggestion
roaming
around relentlessly. In conclusion, in my view, I advocate that having the youngsters to be free to do things will help cultivating their creative thinking, though boundaries need to be applied by their parent to avoid them to mingle with the wrong side of the society.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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