Some people think that all teenagers should be required to do unpaid work in their free time to help the community. They believe this would benefit both the individuals, teenagers and society as a whole. Do you agree or disagree?

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Recently, governments had implemented a program which all students need to accomplish before they graduate from high school and

this

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program involve in doing volunteer

work

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for

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the community. Some individuals believe that doing social service can

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benefit

the

society

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as well as the teenagers. I

am strongly agreed

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have strongly agreed

strongly agree

with

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notion.

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of all, incorporating social

work

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in the subjects

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as Mathematics, Moral Education and Science can aid the students to understand the topic better as they are able to observe how these subjects are essential to the real world.

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that, they would not get as bored in the class as they have the chance to do practical

work

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, enhancing their understanding as well as their skills.

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, being a cashier in a

supermall

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super mall

helps in developing their arithmetic skills,

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excelling well when Mathematics test comes up.

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, engaging internship job increases the communication skills.

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, they will be more confident with themselves and able to conserve well to people of different ages. Another advantage of

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activity is that it gives a sense of caring and empathy towards the

society

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. By doing community service, it nurtures the sense of responsibility and maturity in adolescent’s mind.

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, they will have

higher emotional IQ

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a higher emotional IQ

in them, and

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motivates them to contribute more to the

society

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when they grow older. Take an example of Will Smith,

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a famous actor

the famous actor

who frequently contributing something to his community people

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as donation and free books for

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students since he was young.

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, the state of the people living there became a better place than before. To conclude, I strongly advocate that doing unpaid

work

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for the

society

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, will definitely help

the younger

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the young

to develop vital skills needed in the future and at the same time, a sense of satisfaction that they

are changing

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have changed

the world into a better place by their small yet powerful contribution.

shaktypreyananthiniMon May 06 2019

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

In conclusion
To conclude
To summarize
Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

321 words

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Some people think that all teenagers should be required to do unpaid work in their free time to help the community. They believe this would benefit both the individuals, teenagers and society as a whole. Do you agree or disagree?

Include an introduction and conclusion

In the past, most people worked for small businesses, while more people now work for large businesses. What are the advantages and disadvantages of working for large businesses?

Living in a country where you have to speak a foreign language can cause serious social problems, as well as practical problems. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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The use of social media such as Facebook or Twitter is replacing face-to-face contact this century. Do you think the advantages of this development outweigh the disadvantages?

Nowadays, some people like to give help to the local community or provide people with direct help. Other pople prefer to give money to national and international organisations. Discuss both methods and give your own opinion on which is better.