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Your are living in a university residence, and you have a problem with the high levels  of Boise a letter campus restaurant Wich is open until midnight Write a letter to the governor of The University.

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Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing to express my dissatisfaction with the canteen of the residence of "Princeton University". Actually, I am a second-year student of foreign languages from Ms.Monica's group. Unfortunately, I am facing difficulty with my sleep
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 the high level of noise which is coming from the kitchen. I need to mention that, no one is doing it in case. As we know, some students prefer to do homework in a team and students prefer the canteen as it contains enough space for a lot of people. In my point of view, the reason for doing
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, that doing homework during the night or until midnight is an effective way to learn and helps to get more friends. I respect that they do home tasks but it really disturbs other students. I would really appreciate it if you understand my situation and give me
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 hand with setting limitations on the canteen's working hours (maybe until 23 pm). Yours sincerely, Rachel Green.

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Task Achievement
Consider providing more specific examples to strengthen your argument about the noise issue.
Coherence and Cohesion
Try to improve the flow between sentences and paragraphs to enhance coherence.
Coherence and Cohesion
Make sure to investigate the use of some phrases to avoid grammatical inaccuracies and improve clarity.
Tone
The letter maintains a polite tone throughout, which is important for formal communication.
Content
You clearly state your issue with noise and provide a suggested solution, which is a good structure for a letter.

Structure your letter

A letter needs to be written using a proper format, including the following:

  • A greeting (Dear sir/madam, Dear John, Dear Mr. Smith)
  • The main body (consisting of paragraphs for each part of the letter)
  • A closing (Yours sincerely, Yours faithfully, Best wishes, Kind regards, Love)

When writing a letter as part of the IELTS General Training Writing Task 1, it is important to include the bullet points presented to you in the question.

All three bullet points need to be presented. And remember that some bullet points contain more than one element. So, make sure to watch for ‘and’ and plurals.

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